
Lorna watched her friend as they neared the front steps of the old house. Helen had been all too eager for this 'outing', and she wasn't sure she trusted her. A slight breeze caught Lorna's tawny blond hair, making wheat colored slashes across her eyes. Through them, she watched Helen intently, wondering what was in store for her inside.

Helen turned, smiling sweetly, "We can turn back, if you want." Her blue eyes sparkled with mischief, her dark hair swaying with the gentle breeze, "You look like a doe caught in headlights." Lorna shook her head, "No. I'm fine. Just wondering what you've set up, that's all."




Helen continued to smile as if they were entering Disney World.

She opened the door slowly, her face delighted at the awful creaking noise it made. Lorna stepped in behind her and the sight of the place caused her breath to catch in her throat.


Her eyes followed a moonbeam to the curve of a winding staircase, which rose almost endlessly up and to the left of the top floor. In that curve, at it's base, sat an upright piano born of a rich mahogany. It would have been beautiful anywhere else. Helen nearly squealed with delight upon spying it. She loved pianos; had played by ear since she was old enough to climb onto a piano stool. She went to it immediately, sliding onto the leather covered bench and touching the wood lovingly. She admired it for a moment, then began to play a tune that sent shivers up Lorna's spine. She half expected Vincent Price to float down the staircase, laughing like a mad man.


"At least give me the flashlight," Lorna waited as Helen reached into her back pocket and extracted a tiny pin light, "That's it? You brought me to this...this glorified mausoleum with nothing but a pin light?" Lorna wondered for the millionth time why she remained friends with the girl. They were opposites in every way; Lorna was subdued, modest. Helen was forever flaunting her cleavage to the world, wearing jeans so tight that she couldn't draw a deep breath. And always fucking with some one's mind. They couldn't have been more different. But, there was something about Helen that drew Lorna to her. Maybe her fearlessness.

She shined the pin light around the great room, shaking her head as Helen continued to play. The tiny light flickered, then was gone.

She shook it several times, then threw it across the room. Just as it hit the far wall, Lorna felt a chill creep up her spine.

She heard a whisper...a male voice...as if someone called her name from the top of the staircase, "Lor....na.." so faint, so distant that it was barely audible...but she had heard it. She was certain of it. A cold breeze swept across her face, and she could feel eyes boring into her back.

"Helen?" she called softly, almost afraid to speak. The music played on. "Helen!" she cried out in such a way that her friend's fingers slammed into the keyboard.



Helen's voice startled Lorna, causing her to grip the locket tightly, "What is it Lorn?"
When Lorna merely stared ahead, Helen's eyes followed her gaze, her brow knitted in confusion. Seeing nothing of interest, she rolled her eyes in frustration, "For God's sake, will you get a grip? I don't know why you always-"

"Shhh!" Lorna whispered, sticking her hand up quickly, "Listen. Don't you hear that? It sounds like it's coming from the second floor."

She continued to watch the stairs, with the distinct feeling that someone returned her gaze. She wanted to run...but felt frozen to the spot... as if some irresistible force held her there.

She felt a hand on her shoulder and screamed frantically, then broke into a run, the force's spell broken.



She pulled at the door handles, each one in turn, but the red Dodge Charger was locked.

A wave of nausea washed over her as she heard footsteps crunching through dried leaves....the sound seemed to come from behind her, growing louder until Lorna covered her ears to drown it out. She closed her eyes tightly, not wanting to see who or what was pursuing her. The noise grew closer, then fell silent. She could hear the faint sound of breathing mixed with a sudden autumn wind.

Her heart nearly stopped when a hand grasped her arm, and she pushed hard against her assailant. There was a sharp cry, then the sound of something hitting the ground. She opened her eyes slowly...
......TO BE CONTINUED!
Thank you for reading!
-Eve and Zayury
22 comments:
My dear friend, I am so glad that you allowed me to be part of making your dream come true! Finishing a Story! CONGRATULATIONS! Eve you deserve this and a lot more, you are a magnificent writer, don't let anyone tell you differently, EVER!
Love ya my friend!
What a FANTASTIC JOB! It thrills the center of my bones! I LOVE THE CHILL! You two are the duo of the decade! Keep up the Amazing works of art! As long as you two keep posting, I'll keep reading!
Great job, I think I was more spooked than Lorna, I would have ran a long time ago. Love the flow of the story, very easy read each line pulls you in and makes you want more. Beautifully illustrated. Can't wait for the next part I'm secretly hoping she knocked Helen's butt out (Why did she have to see the house at night? LOL). EXCELLENT JOB!!!!
Thank you all, my friends! I'm so glad you enjoyed part one. I hope we can post Chapter 2 pretty soon, because it has some juicy bits! Thanks for reading and commenting.
And, Zayury, thank you for those wonderful pics! The story just wouldn't mean much without them!
My heart was pounding as I read this! I am one who has always loved to be scared. Thrillers, horror movies, any suspense at all and I am hooked.
The writing is superb. The photos a perfect compliment. Simply brilliant! Please let me know when you post the next part!
Great job, the pictures are unbelievable expressive and the text creates a perfectly fitting mood! You two are really a perfect duo!
Wow! What gorgeous shots!! Spooky and suspenseful -- you really know how to bring a scene to life!
Love this -- looking forward to the next part!
Amazing effort! The shots were fantastic, but the writing, "crunching of the leaves" so descriptive and wonderfully crafted, it evoked the mood of suspense and fright perfectly! You are just as talented as I suspected...more so even!!
Cheers!
~~Karen~~
Thanks, all of you, for such lovely comments! Critiques from fellow writers mean a lot to me, as most of you know. You are all amazing writers and I appreciate that you took the time to read and comment!
Hope you'll enjoy the next chapter as well!
Hi Thanks a lot for signing my GB I read the story straight away, and it was gripping (I didn't understand a couple of words, but who cares X)) Can't wait for the continuation! You together with Eve70 did a good job Thanks a lot, and PM me with the link to the next part when you finish it. Oh, and happy Halloween! ~loveless
Hello, and happy Halloween! Thanks for the direct link, I read the story as soon as I got it. And it was really interesting and scary, but interrupting it on a very exciting moment is a little bit mean I want to read the continuation, of course. And thank you, you did a great job!
Thanks for posting this story wonderful GREAT DUO! I look forward to many more.
Redkandies03 at TSR
Wow...wasn't expecting this many comments! Thank you all so much! It means the world to me and Zayury to have our work appreciated!!! She works so hard on her pics, and I'm glad you all can see that in the results. (I still think she's psychic!) I would thank each of you individually, as you deserve, but I am still not well. Please don't give up on me!
Thanks to Gayl and Drew for your 'Get Well' messages; that means the world to me!
Great job! Excellent writing and lovely spooky pictures, they really show the mood of the story, poor Lorna!
Brilliant, there's no other word to describe this story :D
Sandybvv: Thank you so much for reading. Both Zayury and I appreciate your sweet comment! I promise Chapter two will be up soon!
I accually read this first some time ago and appearantly forgot to tell you how wonderful it is (Yes, I am blond...) You are artists! There are stories and then there are pieces of word art. I believe this falls into the last category, I love the way both pictures and the text is composed. Truly enjoyable! I love the way some words are in itallic, it gives them some extra meaning... Thank you! Ophelia Nival.
Dear Ophelia, it's never too late to receive such a wonderful comment! Thank-you! :)
A griping story...let me continue on with it.....
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